First off, welcome to Etsy! I’m sorry to hear you’re struggling to get that first sale. I think in speaking with your fellow sellers, you’ll see many people can relate. I’m going to move this thread over to Business Topics, which is the best place for the type of discussion forming here.
The tips here are great. The seller community is definitely one of your biggest resources. If you are ever looking for an in-depth critique, I would suggest you check out a critique team, over here: www.etsy.com/teams/search/?search_query=critique&sort=relevancy&sea...
I also wanted to tip you off to the newest edition of the Seller Handbook. It’s a massive, extremely valuable resource of information about everything Etsy, especially helpful to new sellers: www.etsy.com/blog/en/2012/the-seller-handbook/
. Check it out and share with us what you learn,